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    Personal Aspiration and Life Aspiration

    最近在申请某奖学金,痛苦地失败了一次,准备再申请一次。因此比较认真的对待Personal Statement。里面有两个问题,关于Personal Aspiration 和 Life Aspiration。说实话我搞不清楚这两个到底有什么区别,因此第一次申请的时候胡乱写了一通。经过一番苦思,这次写出如下真实的aspiration与诸位分享。不知诸位的Personal 和 Life aspiration是什么呢?
     

    Personal Aspiration

    I want to own my own boat and become a sailor some day, which might not be professional. I was born in a seaside city Ningbo, China and lived there for 18 years. Then I spent my 7 college years in another seaside city Dalian. And now I’ve been in Singapore for six years. I feel my life is somehow connected to the blue. During the years, my dream of having a boat has been growing. I simply love water and nothing is better to feel water than cruising in my own boat.

     Life Aspiration

    A few decades from now, when I look back at my life, I would like to see myself as a person who had a fairly good career and who really experienced a lot in the world.

    Back in 2003, I gave up a chance to start a career in an interesting field and came to Singapore. Having been a student for many years, I did want to start a career. But studying overseas was a great opportunity to see the world.

    Looking back after 6 years, I can’t imagine how my life would have been if I made a different choice. But I am sure I like Singapore and South East Asia very much. In here, I make friends from different cultures and speak some Singalish now. During the study in Operation Management program of Nanyang Business School, I had chances to work with agricultural products distributor and shipping operators. Now I have started and focused on a career in energy trading. I really appreciate these precious experiences and hope to get more.

     

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    vivian wangwrote:
    这文章写得,幸好改了~~~加油练英文写作吧...真得太重要了,我写文章凡是磊了一堆文字的部分总是要被导师改得面目全非!
    July 21
    Eric Niewrote:
    Interestingly, 申商学院的时候,有篇essay问"If you were not pursuing the career goals you described in Question 1, what profession would you pursue instead?"。我讲的就是energy trader。感兴趣的话,我可以把那篇essay发给你。
    July 21
    Bank Chenwrote:
    哈哈,差距一下就出来了。苦啊,其实我career aspiration写得还可以的,自己看了几次觉得ok。但是这个personal/life aspiration自己看也觉得惨不忍睹。根本原因我压根没有什么personal/life aspiration。我唯一的强烈的愿望是赚大钱,hoho
    July 20
    猪猪 何wrote:
    赞一下eric写的
    bank你的原文太幼稚了
    July 20
    Bank Chenwrote:
    呵呵,偶修改了一下,改得目有那么华丽丽 :》
    July 18
    Eric Niewrote:
    To Harry, 正好可以引用一下我们finance教授的话:

    During booms the muse is silenced
    poets take jobs in high finance.

    But when crises hit their lowest
    finance students become poets.

    btw, CBank, 你也得把另一篇改改吧,不然文风太不一样了
    July 17
    Harrywrote:
    eric, 强啊. 开始兼职写软文吧
    July 17
    Bank Chenwrote:
    Eric,太及时了,我赶紧从mail room把材料拿出来修改了
    July 17
    Eric Niewrote:
    嘻嘻,帮你把第一段大致修改了一下 :)

    Cruising in my very own boat, wind is my only friend
    Looking ahead, in that vast blue water lies a dream of my childhood...

    I lived all my years so close to ocean ...
    Born in a coastal city, chasing tides and swimming in the ocean filled all my childhood memory:
    Right on the seaside, spent my sweet sixteen ...college farewell party ...celebration to my first job...
    Ocean has always been unseperatable part of my life.
    I just like sitting there and watching the ocean, ebb and flow make me feel calm, confident, connected...

    I found myself so connected to ocean.
    Through it I found strength, freedom and more importantly, aspiration to life
    Charting my own path, chasing my own dream, I am myself, I AM the world! to become a sailor is a secret wish I've always deeply cherished
    Simply because I just love being with thy ocean
    July 17
    Abbywrote:
    UP海贼的思路!
    July 17
    quanwrote:
    你不如说你的pa是当个海贼,绝对比你现在这个帅
    July 16
    miranda wangwrote:
    我总觉得差了些闪光点,没有让人眼前一亮的感觉。。。
    这个就如同申请学校中的ps一样,能让招生办的人感觉你有能力在这里学习。
    但是我从你的这个ps中没有看到,可能我说话比较刻薄啦。你既然想申请奖学金,你就应该认真对待,而不是随便写写,应付了事。
    July 16
    Tiger SHENwrote:
    我弄了橡皮艇,带5匹的挂机,但只能在姚江里面开来开去。
    July 16
    HONG GUIwrote:
    I feel my life is somehow connected to the blue
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    u know theres a company called blue..
    July 16
    Weiwrote:
    不够说服力,你加点料,具体的路线、活动啥的。比如开船去舟山群岛、南沙群岛玩儿,海钓、潜水、去公海赌博啥的,哈哈。
    July 16
    Bank Chenwrote:
    我自己又读了一遍,觉得一点都不激动人心,good luck to myself...
    July 16
    Abbywrote:
    Feel like I am connected with ocean too. Excluding Beijing...
    July 16
    Weiwrote:
    沙发!

    PA是事业规划?LA是人生理想?
    July 16

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